[ Personal Critique Thread ]

Am I doing it wrong? Did I suspend reality (and characterization) a little too much, even for Poly?

I'm not the perfect roleplayer, and I've never claimed to be, but I would like to do the best that I can so that everyone can have the best experience possible.

In light of that, a critique thread! Feel free to use it. Comments are screened, so really, say what you want, however you want, and so forth.

Wuv. ♥

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Duuude. [ hic ] I bet... I bet ain't no one tried drinkin' from the fountain before.

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Who wants t'bet that it's another experience entirely, eh?

Actually, better yet. [ hic ]

WHO WANTS T'JOIN ME?


[ooc; Been binging since the cursed day of sobriety.]

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I don't get it. What's th'point of cuttin' a tree down and puttin' it up in yer house if ya ain't gonna use it for firewood?

'sides, these trees? Smell really weird. Almost like they're... spicy.

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Which doesn't mean I'm gonna lick the tree t'test that out.


[ooc; Someone please explain Christmas to him. :<]

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So, y'know what I discovered lately? Someone told me that there're such things as filters. Y'know, which help ya choose who y'want t'see yer posts and shit.

I NEVER KNEW THIS. WHAT THE HELL. I coulda kept myself outta so much trouble--

--er. Well. Anyway.

There's another thing I'd like t'learn though. A lotta people been dancin' these past coupla days, and I kinda watched one--shut up--and...

...what th'fuck's a YMCA?

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Damn, Chichiri, do ya always gotta up and disappear like that? You'd think that it'd be better for us to... talk 'bout these stones some more...

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Where th'hell am I? This ain't the same forest I was just walkin' in a little while ago.

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TAIITSUKUN, GIMME A WARNIN' IF YER ABOUT T'SHOW UP, ALRIGHT? I'd rather not die early of a heart attack.


[ooc; Communicator is in his pocket, so voice is muffled. And he actually does have some vague memory of the forest, but a few months have passed in his canon so it's hazy; eventually he'll remember everything. ♥]

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...so, uh.

Uh.

There's a school here... right?

Do they, uh.

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Cantheyteachmehowtoread?

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SHUT UP, IT AIN'T REAL COMMON IN MY WORLD, 'KAY!?


[ooc; Baby worked up the nerve to ask. And his world is like ancient China, so yes, being fully literate? Not common at all.]

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Riiight, so. I know that people've got their shit to do in their worlds, and it's probably a whole hell of a lot better t'actually get to do them rather than continue to be stuck in a place like this, but y'know, whoever's been moving people 'round? Whether it be a god, or a magician, or just some generally twisted bastard? Deserves a fuckin' punch to the face.

S'rather unfortunate when they hide t'the extent where I can't deliver it.

Leaves me with a few options.

I can drink.

I can spar.

I can get a steady job, work overtime.

Or I can do all three of those.

Anyone interested? Any combination of the above, really-- just kinda sick of hangin' 'round the house.


[ooc; Nuriko, Natsu, Gray-- Tasuki misses them all, and he's butthurt about it. He's also cursed, so anyone who spars with him will get slapped silly. Bitchslap fest, anyone? ♥]

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( THERE BE LULZ BEHIND THIS NON-IC CUT! )


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...I CAN EXPLAIN.

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And. Uh. Uh. Hotohori? Um. So I kinda flaked out last time... y'know, had to catch up with my girlfriend... and... Ya free tonight for dinner?


[ooc; Why so srs, Poly? C-c-combo breaker!]

Kou Shun'u. Genrou. Tasuki. Kou Shun'u. Genrou. Tasuki. Kou Shun'u. Genrou. Tasuki. Kou Shun'u. Genrou. Tasuki. Kou Shun'u. Genrou. Tasuki. Kou Shun'u. Genrou. Tasuki.

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Kou Shun'u.

Kou Shun'u.

Tasuki.


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...th'hell is this shit? My hand can't stop writin' my fuckin' name all over the house.


[ooc; Writing letters would be all fine and good if Tasuki could write properly. But, erm, ancient China. Yeah. He can't. He might randomly start writing numbers and words that make no sense when strung together?]

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I have often walked down this street before;
But the pavement always stayed beneath my feet before.
All at once am I several stories high.
Knowing I'm on the street where you live.
Are there lilac trees in the heart of town?
Can you hear a lark in any other part of town?
Does enchantment pour out of ev'ry door?
No, it's just on the street where you live!

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[ooc; Today, for Tasuki, songs from Audrey Hepburn films! And, er. He's using his communicator like a microphone, against his will. (He doesn't understand half of what he's saying.)]